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Post by kingjosh on Dec 3, 2006 10:04:59 GMT -5
what else should I add in history?
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Post by Shadow Ninja on Dec 3, 2006 12:03:04 GMT -5
You could add why you have infinite soldier pills.
I want 175 words for history.
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Sasuke
Chunin
Come to me Light....seek my power that you crave
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Post by Sasuke on Dec 3, 2006 12:28:05 GMT -5
Look at other people
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Post by kingjosh on Dec 3, 2006 19:41:41 GMT -5
is it good now?
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Sasuke
Chunin
Come to me Light....seek my power that you crave
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Post by Sasuke on Dec 3, 2006 19:53:01 GMT -5
mabe
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Post by Shadow Ninja on Dec 4, 2006 21:04:52 GMT -5
No, it is NOT ok.
DId you see where I said, "175 words are required for this profile"?
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Sasuke
Chunin
Come to me Light....seek my power that you crave
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Post by Sasuke on Dec 4, 2006 21:06:25 GMT -5
...........................................Are you going to kill me
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Post by Shadow Ninja on Dec 4, 2006 21:09:37 GMT -5
*Curses self for being on this site*
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Sasuke
Chunin
Come to me Light....seek my power that you crave
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Post by Sasuke on Dec 4, 2006 21:11:05 GMT -5
is it cuz of me..........
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Post by kingjosh on Dec 4, 2006 21:17:07 GMT -5
thats not fair because their are some accecpted profiles that have almost the same amount of words as I do....but you didn't say nuts to them......
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Post by Shadow Ninja on Dec 4, 2006 21:20:16 GMT -5
Nuts. LOL. That is because I was not in charge of accepting profiles then, but now I am. Tough break for you.
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Post by kingjosh on Dec 7, 2006 7:09:55 GMT -5
is it good?
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Post by Haruka on Dec 8, 2006 15:22:46 GMT -5
Read over and remove grammatical errors. Put spaces after periods, punctuation, capitalize correctly, correct spelling mistakes e.t.c.
Elaborate more on certain things. Why couldn't he performt the transformation, what do people think of him, what was the academy like, what is his fighting style, what are his strengths, what are his weaknesses. And he can't have unlimited soldier pills, he needs to buy them. I would like to hear more about Riku's life and life experiences.
Also, the timeline for this rp isn't late enough for him to be Kiba's grandson. Just take out the whole Kiba thing.
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Sasuke
Chunin
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Post by Sasuke on Dec 8, 2006 20:30:16 GMT -5
yea what he said
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